Week Three
This week finalized our poems , took self portraits and finished our reading with The Absolutely True Diary of a Part Time Indian
I had a few pieces of descriptive language in my poem. It included sound and some taste and I think i can add some touch. It included how the crowd cheers and yells for the team and I might add how he goes through the field feeling the ball and the grass with his foot.
During the conversation I learned that it is much better to try to make it to the time limit (40 mins) rather than go with your friend after the conversation because later you will have a lot of questions that will need to be answered in order to finish and make a great descriptive poem. I also learned that it's sometimes better to wait for your partner to finish talking because he might say something you never thought was important.
I think that the most useful part of the revision was when we identified how specific our phrases were to the person. This helped me push for a much more specific poem. I think it would have been better if we had a similar sheet but for descriptive language. The next time I revise a piece of work I am going to do it when I do not have a writers block (which is most of the time) but I will also look out for how much descriptive language I need to add.
I had a few pieces of descriptive language in my poem. It included sound and some taste and I think i can add some touch. It included how the crowd cheers and yells for the team and I might add how he goes through the field feeling the ball and the grass with his foot.
During the conversation I learned that it is much better to try to make it to the time limit (40 mins) rather than go with your friend after the conversation because later you will have a lot of questions that will need to be answered in order to finish and make a great descriptive poem. I also learned that it's sometimes better to wait for your partner to finish talking because he might say something you never thought was important.
I think that the most useful part of the revision was when we identified how specific our phrases were to the person. This helped me push for a much more specific poem. I think it would have been better if we had a similar sheet but for descriptive language. The next time I revise a piece of work I am going to do it when I do not have a writers block (which is most of the time) but I will also look out for how much descriptive language I need to add.